I am learning to make my writing more interesting for the reader.
I know I will be able to do this when I add more detail, interesting words and include what I see, hear, smell and feel.
I woke up at 7 o’clock in the morning. We were going to Nelson.
This was going to be the perfect day.
I went to Uncle’s house in Nelson. While we were there Marshall took us to the aquatic centre.
We went swimming in the pool. after swimming we ate fish and chips with my family.
It was a good day and the water was warm.
Kia ora Mana. I like the way you wrote about going to the aquatic centre. How did you feel when you arrived at the aquatic centre Mana? What could you see and hear when you walked in?
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